Judge’s Critique

Contest:

Fall 2004

Title:

Author(s):

BRIAN KERR

Result:

Judge’s Score Sheet

Category

Score

Notes

Emotional Impact

1   2   3   4   5

Hook

1   2   3   4   5

Originality

1   2   3   4   5

Appeal

1   2   3   4   5

Focus

1   2   3   4   5

Phrasing/Cadence

1   2   3   4   5

Form

1   2   3   4   5

TOTAL SCORE

29

Judges Comments

Very creative idea and story - it kept unfolding with each verse and kept my interest to the end! Four verses, however, is too long for serious consideration by a publisher or producer. I suggest a careful and creative "edit" to get the song down to 2 verse/2 choruses (and perhaps a bridge and final chorus).

Try to use your hook more than once in the chorus - preferably at the first or last line.