Judges Critique

2nd Place

2004 DSA Winter Lyric Contest

EDGE OF THE WORLD
By Claude Diamond

Judge 1

I like this a lot, good use of imagery, proper title selection and placement.
My only nit is the bridge really feels more like verse 3.
It doesn't allow the melody writer to contrast.

Judge 2

We've all heard about the homeless and this song makes him human.  I though the hook was excellent and worked well in the song. The rhyme scheme was also good.

Judge 3

Good title and hook. Good story. I especially liked the 1^st verse with the contrasting the height from which this person fell, from the ivory towers to the park bench.  3^rd line of the chorus seemed too much of a tongue twister.