Judge’s Critique

 

Contest:

Spring 2005

  

Title:

 Solitary Waltz

 

Author(s):

Glenda Perkins

  

Result:

 1st Place  

 

Judge’s Score Sheet

Category

Score

Notes

Emotional Impact

1   2   3   4   5

 

Hook

1   2   3   4   5

Originality

1   2   3   4   5

Appeal

1   2   3   4   5

 

Focus

1   2   3   4   5

 

Phrasing/Cadence

1   2   3   4   5

 

Form

1   2   3   4   5

TOTAL SCORE

31

 

 

Judges Comments
This is a very creative lyric in many dimensions. The visual images are captivating - the story is bittersweet. Kinda reminded me of the old lady at the beginning and end of the movie, Titanic. My only suggestion would be to get to the chorus sooner - perhaps after verse one (it would fit very well there). However, if you do that, 3 verses with 3 choruses may be a bit long. Consider making verse 3 into a bridge that contrasts from the rest of the song and then moves back once more into the chorus. Nice rhymes - good structure! You are a very good lyricist!

 

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